Blog 12

I had a much easier time starting this essay compared to the first one. I believe this is because I started with a body paragraph instead of starting with an indtroductionary paragraph. I think this allowed me to get some of my words down and have a better understanding of what I was going to talk about. I could then take those ideas and put those into my intro. Having a hard time starting my essay has always been hard for me, so it is nice to have a new strategy that I can use in future essays. Another aspect that I reflected on is when I ramble on and repeat myself. This is something that I still need to work on. I know it is a bad habit to do when I write, but this always seems like a step that I go through. A repeat myself way too many times and then I edit out the junk when I go to revise. During my peer review my partner definitely commented on this and advised me not to do this. This is something that I am trying to work on in my writing and I hope to improve on over time. My partner also gave me multiple some examples of where I can add more quotes from the different sources. I had trouble finding quotes from Strawson, but she provided me with a section where a quote from him would work. When I begin to edit my essay, I am going to first begin by rereading it and taking out any parts that do not make sense or where I am repeating myself. I was also planning on writing another body paragraph, so I plan to write that next. I then plan to look for quotes from Strawson that will fit into my essay somewhere. My partner mentioned that I wrote about the positives of narrative and that it might be beneficial for me to talk about the negatives as well. I plan to look over my essay and decide if I want to do this. At this point I plan to look over the rest of my peer’s notes and decide if what she said will better my essay. I lastly plan to reread my essay again and fix any changes that I think need to be changed. I think my biggest challenge is going to be getting rid of the ramble. Though I know it can make it hard to understand, I also don’t want my essay to become unclear. I believe the main cause of me repeating myself is that I want the audience to understand what I’m trying to get across. If I come upon a challenge that I cannot figure out myself, I plan to first email the teacher for help, and if I need help right then and there, then I plan on asking for help from a classmate.